Writing a Well Supported Example
Each pair of students should post four short examples (40 to 50 words maximum) before Friday's class. Two examples should come from "Child, Dead, in the Rose Garden" and two from "A Spoiled Man." It is not necessary to name the story in your answer. Each example must contain a quotation (or two) but quotations should not take up more than half of any one example.
We will review examples on the screen this Friday.
15 comments:
E.L. Doctorow uses atmosphere to show a contrast in his opening paragraphs. When the boy’s body is found, “dew was on the grass” and “the light inside the tent was soft and filled with shadows.” In this beautiful setting, we contrast the ugliness of a boy found in a “shroud-like wrapping.”--51 words
Daniyal Mueenuddin describes the stone-built house as an “empty church or a school.” Daniyal uses simile to show the contrast between the busyness of the party held before to the present quietness of this solemn place after Rezek’s death.
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Calabrese phoned the Marine guard and, “In a matter of moments,” the Secret Service was at the site. The passage of time indicates how fast they arrived at the scene right after Calabrese found a Nike running shoe and phoned them. -42words
The American wife, Sonya, and her old majordomo, Ghulam Rasool, had been depending on each other. Sonya “felt closer” to him than “to anyone else in Pakistan.” Although she thought and acted in American way, Ghualm always used his wisdom to communicate with her and helped the others.
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It is ironic to describe Sonya thought of “her own dead” and “her father and mother lying … in a Wisconsin graveyard” at Rezak’s little funeral. Sonya had everything and lived in an elegant life without any similarity with Rezak. It is true that everyone equals in front of death.
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Question 2: How do the character relate to one another? What pleasures and conflict do their relationship with one another cause?
• Rezak says, “No, you have to really eat.” He is critical of his friend to cheat him “Look, I’ve taken some”. Rezak angrily leaves, but the chicken is “still on the table”. Their conflict is Rezak wants to share his chicken with his friend; however, this “Time-expired birds” is unwelcome. (A Spoiled Man: 50 words - Qin)
Question 5: What are the personal qualities of protagonist? How do these qualities relate to or affect a conflict?
• Author portrayed Chrissie as a novice and irresponsible young person. She felt very amateurish and weak against skillful and powerful “configured gentlemen”. “Her Marine reached over and held her hand”, during her blunt and outspoken dialogue with Agent Molloy, to calm her resentment. (Child, Dead, in the Rose Garden: 43 words - Jatinder)
• Rezak is solitary and faint-hearted. After hearing “Suit yourself then”, Rezak stands watching the gardeners talking. He wishes “He had accepted” because of “Melancholy invaded him.” However, he merely sees the distance instead. Undoubtedly, his actions represent his timidity in the relationship between him and Rasool. (A Spoiled Man: 46 words - Qin)
Question 6: Is there any use of figurative language? Why is it used? Are there any especially important word choices?
• Chrissie’s desire to “put a tincture of shame into their hearts” indirectly refers to shameless, powerful people at the highest social hierarchy in modern society. The author used the word “tincture” to show that only a small amount of shame may change the hearts of these “Configured gentlemen”. (Child, Dead, in the Rose Garden: 48 words - Jatinder)
1.Character and Conflict Example
Chrissie keeps bringing up “we” and “they” in her speech: “… they always win, … It didn’t come out as we planned …, they would have known how to handle it.” It shows the conflict she voluntarily sets between her and the upper class her Dad represents.
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2. Hyperbole and Setting Example
Doctorow describes “them” as “not in their personal nature violent and would never lift a hand against a child”, on the other hand “they” are “configured to win. And fuck all else”. It shows deeply the hypocrisy of the class especially it is revealed by the daughter of the class.
(50 words)
Chrisse Stevens strikes out to make her point that all the “configured gentlemen” are
“Configured to win. And fuck all else.” Her point given makes it clear that the image that the government likes to portray to society, isn’t what it seems. Many things are kept hidden—it’s flawed.
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Doctorow begins describing the scene: “the White house grounds and gardens stood immaculate under the mid morning sun.” Here the atmosphere begins to become shocking and puzzling, as why after a body was just found, would everything be portrayed free from fault?
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Rezak considers the waiter as his good friend and loves to share his valuable things with this friend, even though it’s a “time-expired bird” So, when the waiter only pretends to eat the bird, Rezak becomes quite upset. Their conflict arises mainly because of Rezak’s gullibility. (47 words)
On the other hand, the waiter kindly treats Rezak despite his lowly status; he tries to have conversation with this lonely guy and makes him feel welcomed anytime, and thus Rezak relies on his friendship. Through the waiter’s thoughtful consideration, the teahouse becomes a resting place for Rezak. (48 words)
E.L. Doctorow uses mood to help the setting. It starts out with a child's body being found in the rose garden. Then goes to something happier with the party they had last night. Then goes back to the child's body and people being evacuated out of the white house. --49 Words
It's Ironic how instead of doing the usual taping around the crime scene and shutting off the block from the public, the Police were more concerned about getting the president and his guests out of the white house and covering up the crime scene and quick as possible.
--48 Words
A Spoiled Man:
Q2. Rezak considered the waiter as friend, but he felt upset when he noticed that his friend did not want his gift. They happened to be in a conflict during the incident because the waiter thought Razek’s gift is somewhat filthy in his opinion.
(44 words)
Q5. As a begger as poor as Rezak were, sharing foods with another person meant a great deal to him. As a result, when he realized that his friend did not really want to try his food, it somewhat hurted his feeling.
(42 words)
The author, B.W. Molloy, had an irony in the setting, where the place the child’s dead body was found was the place where “a concert had been given the night before in celebration of the National Arts and Humanities Awards”. However, the reason of the child’s death is in such an inhumanity way.
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The relationship between Sonya and Rezak was very close. “Sonya came up from Islamabad at nightfall, bringing just her young son and his ayah” already explain that the Rezak’s death was very personal to her so that she need to come although it was dark and she didn’t need too many unrelated people to be involved (compared to where the party was usually held in this place).
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The spoil man
Setting example
Rezak, standing alone, facing the direction of the Harouni house, could see “a swimming pool with curving sides, overhung by chinar trees and willows”. Daniyal Mueenuddin, describes Harouni house as a pleasant and peaceful place to live, the detail that motivated Rezak to want to work for the Harounis; even if it meant doing so for free.
Character
Lonely as he was: “Rezak relied upon his welcome in the teahouse”. This is to describe how lonely Rezak is, and the only thing he could depend on, is the teahouse reception. Daniyal Mueenuddin, helps us to vividly understands Rezak loneliness, and his “connection with the teahouse”
1. Elements of Setting
Doctorow started the story “One morning the body of a child was found in the Rose Garden.” Where is the Rose Garden? It is located at the West Wing of the White House; extremely well protected house. From the beginning, he attract reader’s interest at a time.
(Child, Dead, in the Rose Garden: 47 words, Kenny)
2. Irony
It is irony that Chrissie is fighting with her father; therefore, she said “they always win.” She brought a body of dead child to the Rose Garden to “put a tincture of shame into their heart” but her father made it never happened.
(Child, Dead, in the Rose Garden: 43 words, Kenny)
The most important object in the story is the corpse of the dead child, and described in a political manner. Also, the atmosphere of the story makes the audience feel with suspect and mystery of how “a boy, white, perhaps five or six years old” was dead in the “Rose Garden”.
(51 Words)
The author described life destruction in some way. As modernity makes our lives comfortable, on the other hand it damages our society. So, in order to gain their goals, the super powers use a special manner to hide this tragedy which often affects the middle class.
(47 Words)
“A National Arts and Humanities Awards” was given the night before a body “of that of a boy, white, perhaps five or six years old” was found .Here, the author uses irony, an event held to honor people, is quickly changed over with the death of a little boy – no one is honored by these high power people.
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E. L. Doctorow uses the word “configured” 4 times, indicating it an important word choice. Configured, defined as to set up or arrange something in such a way that’s its ready for a particular purpose, is seen with Chrisse Stevens. She uses the word configured to help define the gentlemen “who run things”.
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second draft:
The author, B.W. Molloy, applied irony in the setting: “One morning the body of a child was found in the Rose Garden. . . A concert had been given the night before in celebration of the National Arts and Humanities Awards.” But, the child’s death ended in such an inhumanity way.
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Daniyal Mueenuddin presents us precisely the closeness of relationship between Rezak and Sonya when “Sonya came up from Islamabad at nightfall, bringing just her young son and his ayah.” The atmosphere built by the timing, the persons involved and the purposefulness contrasts dramatically with the atmosphere of the previous party.
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