Wednesday, October 3, 2007

Lindsay's October 3 Group Work

Each student in the group is responsible for posting one short example. Group members are Kaisa, Catherine, Vincent and Jonathan.

Posted by Brad at 10/03/2007 10:46:00 AM

6 comments:

Lindsay said...

Catherine, Brad's writing tip would be a good one for you to check out if you haven't already!

October 3, 2007 at 9:39 PM
Catherine said...

Dear Lindsay,

Thank you very much! I’ll review it later.

It's a pleasure to talk with you. Our discussion wakes my mind. Thanks again for your patience!

Here’s my example; welcome any advices!

3. The story, “The Heyday of the Blood,” has richly detailed descriptions of the setting. Choose one short passage in the story and comment on what it shows to us.

Gran’ther Pendleton wants to go the country fair, even he has to drive “fourteen miles in the heat of August”. His doctor and grandson believe that it will kill him, so they say “No”. Fisher uses this special setting to create a new conflict between the old man and his families, doctor, and himself. It also develops the old man’s “naughty” character and the topic of this story, ‘The Heyday of the Blood”.

October 3, 2007 at 10:00 PM
Lindsay said...

Catherine,
Very good example of the setting the heat of august gives you a real feel for it and for gran'thers conditions. I think all you really need is thoses first quotaions as they are a strong enough example for your short paragraph. Here's mine:

My example is from question #4 The Conflicts in the story

Mallory wakes up in the morning to his mother shaking him, she has some bad news about gran’ther, “he’s been suffering all night long.” This is a conflict that gran’ther has with himself because he is old and been through a lot so his body can’t handle the exciting things that gran’ther wants to do. Mallory walks in expecting the worse, but gran’ther still in as best spirits as possible attempts a smile and says, “it was wuth it, warn’t it.”

October 3, 2007 at 10:41 PM
Lydia said...

Hello Brad,

I have already finished reading the handout you gave us yesterday.I am trying my best to follow the rules in my rewiting,and I would like to get your comments on my rewriting because it is so useful for me.
Here is my example:

Question 1:Write a character portrait of GrantherPandleton.Look closely at two of his actions in the story and explain what each one shows us about this man.

The Granther Pendleton is a brave and adventurous character in the story.He desires to go to the country fair,eventhough the hot wether and long distance drive would kill him,he tell Mollory,"But, I am eighty-eight!"When I read what he say,a dauntless old man vividly appeared in front of me.

October 4, 2007 at 11:58 AM
Vincent said...

Hi!

Your examples are all very good!
Catherine's example improves a lot!

My example question is:
Write a character portrait of GrantherPandleton.

And my answer is:

Granther is a curious and confident person. We can know his personality traits from two actions. When he thinks he "She'd keep ona-ridin'" the merry-go-round, we know he is curious. His confidence urges him to explore the world. He doesn't worry about his life and "bet-che a dollar" gambling on horse-race. Even though he doesn't have one dollar, he desires fun and adventures to entertain his life.

October 4, 2007 at 7:26 PM
Kaisa said...

"We're goin to go a skylarkin," Gran'ther shouts with glee, excited that he's going to the fair against his sons wishes. But did Gran'ther care that he was going against the wishes of his family? Probably not, as they we're "goin to have more fun than ever was in the world". This action shows Gran'thers adventurous and brave side of his character. Even though Gran'ther is eighty-eight years old, he still believes he has enough life in him to have himself a good time, even if it means disobeying his family.

October 4, 2007 at 11:50 PM

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